Commentary Letter
Rosemarie,
Between English 111 and English 112, I see some differences. Most notably, is your use of detail to explain your positions. For example, in your argumentative essay from 111, you use quotations to support your points, but they are often presented in isolation (paragraphs 2 and 3) with little to no commentary specifically explaining how the evidence serves to prove your point. However, your "Feminist Dating" essay explicitly presents your points and supporting evidence in a way that indicates your passion for the subject. You appear to have come in to your own as a writer, and your voice, which is most evident in your later essays, is more apparent.
I am proud to see the growth in your writing from one course to the next, and I am even more proud to have been your teacher!
Between English 111 and English 112, I see some differences. Most notably, is your use of detail to explain your positions. For example, in your argumentative essay from 111, you use quotations to support your points, but they are often presented in isolation (paragraphs 2 and 3) with little to no commentary specifically explaining how the evidence serves to prove your point. However, your "Feminist Dating" essay explicitly presents your points and supporting evidence in a way that indicates your passion for the subject. You appear to have come in to your own as a writer, and your voice, which is most evident in your later essays, is more apparent.
I am proud to see the growth in your writing from one course to the next, and I am even more proud to have been your teacher!